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    dots Submission Name: What It Isdots
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    Author: strokes
    ASL Info:    20/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 20/26/26
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1016
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 492



    Description:
       just ventin a little bit of feelin


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    dots What It Isdots
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    Its breaking,
    and its pain,
    its all these feelings coming back again.

    Its heartache,
    and its sorrow,
    and its not wanting to see tomorrow.

    Its reality,
    that our time was a waste,
    but where you stood, stands empty space.

    Its forever,
    to purge my head,
    and to forget all the lies you ever said.

    Its the price,
    one must pay,
    in hope to find love another day.




    Submitted on 2006-09-06 18:33:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this, it's beautifully simple and straight-forward.

    If anything, I might change:
    get you outta
    to
    purge...

    just to keep the syllable count small.

    Nice!
    | Posted on 2010-01-13 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      nice piece. very short but expresses your pain without anything left out.
    good job.
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-29 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem, I know how you feel, I have similar things going on in my life right now, keep writing, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]


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