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    dots Submission Name: Words that do not comedots
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    Author: mon28
    ASL Info:    29 /F /Montana
    Elite Ratio:    6.14 - 176/59/14
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Whatever advice you might have would be helpfull. I am not sure that I am coming acrossed with my true purpose here.


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    dotsWords that do not comedots
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    I am lost in my thoughts when it comes to you.
    Things that I do not know or understand have me questioning endlessly.
    Over analyzed and under socialize is thus the largest cause.
    You see a short conversation with you does lead to days of uncertainty.
    If it can be found, I have yet to find it!
    Why is it so hard for me to be real with you?
    To tell you what I think and how it is I feel.
    Why do those words not come from me?
    If I had them, I could be saved, saved from all of this fretting.
    All of this wondering and guessing.
    Saved from myself and thus headed in the direction of progress.
    Have a result with an unknown ending, but an ending nonetheless.




    Submitted on 2006-09-06 19:52:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      If this isn't fiction for you. I would call this person a weather man. Because when your around him you become a Fog. when you can't even think of the words you wanna say.
    I don't know if this helps but I think it will come in time. So in the mean time polish your form.
    and keep writing.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      despite what ron thinks, not everything evolves around "god", if there is such a being. and that is far from what i got from it. First off it seems as thouhg you attemtped to make this into a pome; first thing i'd do is change the format, think of some synonyms, or possibly just different ways you can phraise it, and lt it come; don't force it; it shows. be chill, bye now
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this write a question that you are asking God or a write to someone here on Earth that has made a big influence on you
    Either way if you look to your heart it will lead you to the happiness you desire
    The heart controls the mind and it seems you are full of many questions that a lot of people seem to always seek the answer to
    I would also say to find the Positives to the negatives that are caring you
    Once you find those positives they will lead to positive energy which in return will open your Heart to happiness
    If you need someone to talk to feel free to pm me
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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