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    dots Submission Name: Yet another angry poemdots
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    Author: StanKross
    ASL Info:    26/M/ON Canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 13/28/17
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 1109
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1707



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    dotsYet another angry poemdots
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    unto our children, the constraints are imposed
    this illusion of safety is packaged & sold
    the ignorance in Innocence is slowly exposed
    incarcerated by this life with no chance for parole

    We define our reality by the thoughts we conceive
    we are raped by a medium we are taught to believe
    slight of hand, you cant understand, what you cant see
    your told how to live, then your told that your free....

    A network of lies is commercialized
    "how you should look"
    As your perceptions become desensitized
    "how you should feel"
    As our youth become demoralized
    "who you should be"
    Bullshit is sold at a higher price
    and we buy and buy and buy....

    The product of our wants
    manufactured into need (greed)
    Now watch the leeches feed

    Distraction is our new found religion
    They have commanded, and you listen
    If It's all in your mind, how could you escape such a prison
    a slave to the system, a pawn in submission

    But no matter how far you manage to jump from this cliff
    you will forever be falling for a life that just doesn't exist

    They monopolize on our trust
    "who you should love"
    Take until there is nothing left
    "how you should live"
    until free-will is a distant memory
    "who should you be"
    A one minded society, now repeat
    obey me, obey me, obey me.....

    The product of confusion
    manufactured into belief (Bleed)
    And now the leeches feed.....




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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a definite break from habitual ranting and ravings of Elite Skills.
    You definitely have a revitalizing approach with your terminology.
    It demands its readerís attention with such ferociousness, itís astounding.
    A stunning follow-up from the first.

    I definitely intend on keeping an eye out your work.
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a definite break from habitual ranting and ravings of Elite Skills.
    You definitely have a revitalizing approach with your terminology.
    It demands its readerís attention with such ferociousness, itís astounding.
    A beautiful follow-up from the first.

    I definitely intend on keeping an eye out your work.
    | Posted on 2006-09-18 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]
      AHHHHH! Omg. Ok...AHHH! Your vocabulary. You're like my freaking HERO today, man! I tell you.

    *Jumps around excited for a while.*

    I'm not even going to like....do anything bad to this piece. Just fix a typo or two.

    The only one I see is leaches. That should be leeches. But, hey. It was so awesome. I'm definitely going to have to check out more of your work. I love the way you use words. It's so refreshing.

    BCute<3
    | Posted on 2006-09-06 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      wow holy freaking [censored] this was some heavy stuff dude wow this has to be fraved it's life in words i dont know what to say what is there to say if you were a superhero i would be scared of you becasue that has some super power infused into that peice it made me want to hear you say every word and hold onto the pause at the end and when the next word beings its all new again holy [censored] that was some good [censored]

    Rak^)
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]


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