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    dots Submission Name: Secretsdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       Sigh... I hate when this happends.. I wrote this poem on paper and never put a date.. sigh.. so the date is unknown although I do remeber writing it so i suppose thats a start hehe.. let me know what you think!


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    dotsSecretsdots
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    My secrets unfold
    one by one
    they come out
    of this so carefully designed box
    "Allow no one"
    "Accept no attempts"
    But I did and now all I do is question
    My choices
    I shed these heavy tear ducts
    Night after night
    Not knowing... what to think of myself
    Things have changed
    Not for the better
    But for the worst
    I made certain choices in my life...
    I made certain goals in my life
    And .. Allowing no one.. Accepting no attempts
    Into this carefully designed box
    Was a choice I made...
    So long ago
    But I've allowed someone
    Behind those walls that keep me in and "them" out!
    For this wound within
    Is bleeding...
    And will not quiet!
    But for this I have no one to blame
    But myself!




    Submitted on 2006-09-07 07:50:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its good javckz but is it the same box you were talkin about in ur other poem...im jus curious...
    annyways keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-10-10 00:00:00 | by anooplokur | [ Reply to This ]
      I know exactly of the pain you are describing
    All through my life I always kept the pain in afraid to let it out because of what new pain it may bring
    Well as the years went on that pain festered inside and brought on an incredible debilatating depression
    I was so sad ansd suicidal
    Now Thank God with the Love of The Lord and The Love of family and friends behind me everything is so clear
    Never again will I lrt that pain bring me back down to the Hell I was living
    My only advice is to let out that pain slowly and deal with it the best you can SLOWLY
    Dont rush it!!!
    Trust me you will start feeling better
    If you need someone to talk to you can always PM me I promise I will answer
    God Bless
    Ron

    And Thank You for all the kind words you recently gave me on my Poems I very much appreciate it
    THANK YOU
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a true poem, i feel everyone can relate to it.
    Writting style is unique.
    Everyone have secrets, i to have, and have done the mistakes of revealing them to other and then being stabded on back.
    Its is appricating how you showcased what happens when a wrong choice is made.
    And telling secret is a choice which when proved wrong can not be blamed on others, since revealing is totallu up to us but somehow we flow in emotion and share our secrets with them and what happens next is a regreatfull.

    Well it blleds the heart from inside, it make us mute for it was purely our mistake and even before doing this mistake we know about it.

    Bye
    Nishant
    | Posted on 2006-09-11 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem, lots of feeling in it. a couple minor spelling mistakes that if corrected would make the flow alot better, like "accpect" I believe should be "accept" and "quiet" should be "quit", but I am kind of a spelling freak :) still a good poem though,
    Your Friend, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      different, not one of the best, true...but definately not one of the worst

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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