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    dots Submission Name: racheldots
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    Author: ziska
    ASL Info:    25/f/md
    Elite Ratio:    7.58 - 121/106/33
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    the light tapping of bare feet on packed dirt
    the dust rising in tiny hurricanes
    to whisper at the beaded hem
    covering your ankles

    stage lights or swaying stalks of wheat
    swaying in time to tatooed hips
    designs clinging to the perfect curves

    beneath the blaze of blue
    the raging oceans of applause
    the silence in my mind expands

    watching your body move
    taking me back
    to the wilderness.




    Submitted on 2006-09-07 12:16:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yep, gotta agree with you about the whole fascination with women dancing... it's hot stuff, and very graceful. Just one of those primal connections I guess.

    Hmm... typo check on "tattooed" yo... you forgot an extra "t"... how's that for pedantic? Lol.

    You know, this puts me in mind of Gypsy dancers... all the earthen references etc... but you've given it an extra dimension by offering an extra twist in regards to this woman being on stage under limelights. Perhaps these limelights are people's adoration for her? Just what it makes me think.

    Yup. Nicely done.
    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      the light tapping of bare feet on packed dirt
    the dust rising in tiny hurricanes
    to whisper at the beaded hem
    covering your ankles

    stage lights or swaying stalks of wheat
    swaying in time to tatooed hips
    designs clinging to the perfect curves

    beneath the blaze of blue
    the raging oceans of applause
    the silence in my mind expands

    watching your body move
    taking me back
    to the wilderness.


    "There was a silk scarf round the moon,
    the planets and the stars;
    the hidden sun hung opulent
    crouching beneath the sky"

    At least that's how it seemed to me. Your description of a native dancer's seductive grasp of natural rhythm appears akin to the pulse of tidal movement and erotic/exotic beauty. Somehow it seems only fitting that a woman should detail the power of women so perfectly.

    At least that's how it seemed to me.
    Very nicely done.
    Take care.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]



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