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When I look at you


Author: smalltown
ASL Info:    37 female, smalltown ill
Elite Ratio:    5.32 - 80 /66 /39
Words: 119
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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When I look at you


When I look at you I see so many joys I hope
and wish one day will be.
When I look at you
I know I can give you all the happiness that
you seek.
When I look at you I see the
promise of unknown pleasures we could
unfold and secrets between lovers that
no one else has been told.
when I look at
you sometimes my heart begains to ache,
for
the revelation of my love may be a mistake.

So for now my emotions I will hide and pray
for the day to arrive when you will touch me
with eyes anew and say,
I see love when I look at you.




Submitted on 2006-09-07 12:29:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you sometimes my heart begains to ache
you meant begins

When I look at you I see so many joys I hope
and wish one day will be.
When I look at you
I know I can give you all the happiness that
you seek.
When I look at you I see the
promise of unknown pleasures we could
unfold and secrets between lovers that
no one else has been told.
when I look at
you sometimes my heart begains to ache,
for
the revelation of my love may be a mistake.
the last lines of this stanza truly gave it life. the language was quite ordinary, but purposeful, and suited the mood, else you were gonna catch it .

then i read the rest, this is sad at times you see something in another person which draws you to them, and you become enraptured in their emotional purpot and portent to you, yet they don't see the same in you, or if they do, then they certaintly don't voice this when it needs to be.

you have some greater revelation of the love you wish to share with this someone, but you can't for fear that your feelings might drive them way, as two same ends of a magnet, and figure they don't know how to love that way.

so you do sit, and hope wish and pray that one day they might come to you, and be the one to extend their hand, and not the other way around.

an excellent write. fav.

Loquacious Mind
| Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ]


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