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    dots Submission Name: Crying for youdots
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    Author: Valle_Siddious
    ASL Info:    17/Male/KY
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 93/85/39
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 220
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 861



    Description:
       I wrote this one long ago.
    Hope u like.


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    dotsCrying for youdots
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    When does it stop? When does it end?
    I'm crying for you, i won't let fate win.
    I want you that bad, i'm screaming inside.
    I'm lost and confused, i just want to go hide.
    Pain and the agony, aching in side me.
    I yell, whats this hell that has slowly surround me?
    Missing you badly, wanting you here.
    A small ray of light shines down, blinding my fear.
    Your beautiful face among all of the Damned.
    I ask you to stay, but my words are all jammed.
    You don't understand what i'm trying to say.
    My God, i just want you to stay, please stay.
    I pull you real closely. My hands round your hips.
    Our faces come closley, softly we kiss.
    You look at me, finally you understand.
    It's quite, quite lonely in the world of the Damned.




    Submitted on 2006-09-07 13:11:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a really nicely written poem. great emotion and it's deep and dark. i like it alot.
    ali
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      Well written and your expression is very refreshing. I enjoyed reading it - well done.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-09-11 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This one was really good, as well. I really liked the last line. Once again, this one fits my mood. Well, talk to you later then!

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      That poem was hot I really can relate to the theme and I like your rhyme scheme that you used. but the only thing I see is that god should be God other than that it's great
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by lexdakid265 | [ Reply to This ]



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