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    dots Submission Name: dead without youdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 498
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 746



    Description:
       i wrote this fopr larry. i know i haven't even talked about him that much on this site but he broke up with me and its all my fault and i dont know how to handle it. he thinks i dont care but i love him so much and it hurts so bad. i wanna die but i wont allow myself that release.


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    dotsdead without youdots
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    i'm falling apart
    he just broke my heart
    i'm dying today
    there's no other way
    i can't stop these tears
    i can't look in mirrors
    i know its my fault
    my life's at a halt
    all i see's his face
    i'm my own disgrace
    i can't ease this pain
    there's nothing to gain
    i did this to me
    how could this be?
    how can i live?
    what can life give?
    i've got this hole
    right here in my soul
    i've made a mistake
    there's one road to take
    that was my last chance
    we've had our last dance
    i'm sorry its true
    but i'm dead without you




    Submitted on 2006-09-07 15:35:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this one it really good, don't we all feel that way...i know i couldn't live without my boyfriend...
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... whyt he [censored] hasnt anyone commented on this yet... you all suck and have no sypathy for my problems... waaaaaaah!!!!
    love...
    your damned self
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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