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    dots Submission Name: Arise the Champion Part 2: The call to Niloc'dots

    Author: Colin Douglas
    ASL Info:    49/male/Redhill,Surrey.UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.79 - 23/28/24
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
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       Part two of my fantasy series of poems

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    dotsArise the Champion Part 2: The call to Niloc'dots

    Deep in the nigh,Niloc's dwelling did stand,
    Carved in the rock of ages, by the masters strong hand.
    His word had become music,then from a tune to a song,
    The Champion answered the call,to dwell in it's throng.

    The Champion must journey for us all

    To a lake of bitter tears,he had found his way,
    Standing on the shoreline,he knew what he had to say.
    He called to a Night Mare to answer his heed,
    Who rose screaming from the depths,a velvet black steed.

    A sturdy beast for the Champion

    With one leap he mounted,holding a handful of mane,
    'Ride fast my friend,we must answer the songs sweet refrain'
    Deep from the misted valley,they rode like a storm,
    While in the enemies camp,rose a sigh, deep and forlorn.

    The Champion rides for revenge

    Through sleet,wind and rain,he rode deep into the nigh,
    Over hills, woods and mountains, onwards they did fly.
    Until,over the plain of truth,he found the rock of ages,
    And inside the main hall,stood Niloc,the wisest of Sages.

    The Champion's life's challenge had begun

    Submitted on 2006-09-07 15:36:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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