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    dots Submission Name: **Heal Medots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 701
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 616



    Description:
       This is just another poem under my suck line. The other poems include: A horses life, Guilty, and Choices. All comments gratefully accepted.


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    dots**Heal Medots
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    When will you have time to
    Hug my lifeless body which
    You can bring to life
    Doing what you know,
    Open love.
    I don't know how to
    Love back but
    I can learn how
    Very quickly if you teach me
    Everything you know
    I want to love you
    Not just like you
    Showing my love for you
    Under my tough skin
    Covering my feelings
    How much it hurts
    My life needs healing
    I need healing
    So help mend my broken heart
    Every stitch will help
    Respect my broken soul
    Yearning for your touch.




    Submitted on 2006-09-07 15:42:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A little cliché, but okay overall. It's good that you have someone to care about in this way. I didn't see anything to special from other love type poems. Overall, this could be improved, but a good start,


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      I just love your writing style! It all flows together perfectly. Very nicely done ^_^

    =Ayane=
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Ayane | [ Reply to This ]
      WHY DO I LIVE IN SUCH MISERY !!!!!!!! COOL!!! Thanks for the insight. This was pretty ingenious[ful] lol.


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      it sounds like u care deeply about this person...very good write...good job and keep writin

    ~Amberger~
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]


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