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Tradegy with a smile


Author: Twisted
Elite Ratio:    7.47 - 159 /57 /75
Words: 41
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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A short poem.


Tradegy with a smile



There’s a woman who knows only sorrow,
and cries only tears of ink,
and I know why she keeps her heart protected,
she is made up of words, and the ink from her eyes,
are writing tragedy upon her cheek.




Submitted on 2006-09-07 16:56:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey this is preatty good sure would of been alot greater if u wrote a bit more over all good write, ty
| Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]


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