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    dots Submission Name: Sewndots
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    Author: Twisted
    Elite Ratio:    7.47 - 159/57/75
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 789
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 211



    Description:
       A very short poem.


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    dotsSewndots
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    A heartbroken under a suffocating silence,
    I hum and continue on with the sewing of my soul,
    those troublesome wounds continue to bleed, as I
    cast away the key to his bloodied heart.




    Submitted on 2006-09-07 17:03:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      'suffocate' is on my favourite words list. so is Asphyxiation.
    I like the alliteration you used there, suffocating silence, and again with sewing and souls, and cast ..key. wheteher you have actually intended it or not.

    I like these four lines.
    You don't need to add.
    Here again, I like the open spaces, they create
    something mysterious.. what has happened?

    Short poems will get short comments, sorry I cannot think of anything else to say.

    Janneke
    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]
      Huh, what to say? I like it. mending a broken heart by hurting the one who broke it, physically or mentally.
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]


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