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    dots Submission Name: Brother's Lullabydots
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    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Bytes: 352



    Description:
       It's not what you think it is. My brother used to sing this to me before I went to bed when I was little. It went to a variation to the tune "Rain rain go away" I think. Just goes to show how messed up that SOB was.....


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    dotsBrother's Lullabydots
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    Here we sit
    In a ring
    Close your eyes
    Now as I sing
    One of us
    Will someday die
    While the rest
    Will wonder why
    As the ghosts
    Come to play
    Try to run
    They beg to stay
    Evilness has left its mark
    It will take you
    In the dark

    .....Goodnight now




    Submitted on 2006-09-07 18:52:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your brother is an awesome dude. It is amazing! Every little bit of it so brilliant. So full of truth too. I like that part near the end especially lot.

    "As the ghosts
    Come to play
    Try to run
    They beg to stay
    Evilness has left its mark
    It will take you
    In the dark"


    It is so amazing. I mean, if there is the dark and there are monsters under your bed, no point telling you that there arent any. There might as well be some so just be brave and live with it. Move on!

    "Try to run, they beg to stay" - I don't know.. The whole poem is just brilliant..

    Hats off!

    peace and empathy,

    | Posted on 2006-10-20 00:00:00 | by forestspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      Dark, just the way I like it. Intriguing even though it's short which in this case is not a fault because you said everything you had to and it was all this piece really needed to make it a very valuable artwork.
    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      ...use to sing that to you when you were little? A..lot..odd to sing to a kid. Insightful, I guess, but still odd. Well, I hope you didn't turn out odd from that song

    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is neat. I like. I know its dark, but I do think it relates to life pretty accurately. The best part is about evil leaving its mark :D
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by fiery whisper | [ Reply to This ]


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