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Falling


Author: Twisted
Elite Ratio:    7.47 - 159 /57 /75
Words: 65
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Nostalgia
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Well, I thought of another approach, so....


Falling



Slowly, falling into the despair of those forgotten, only to realize that the demons are coming hungry for blood.

Through the thresholds of time, we find that everything in our lives come to an end.

So I lay here, waiting for the inevitable to come, with those red roses revealing each of my sins.

Lust.

Envy.

Wrath.

Vanity.




Submitted on 2006-09-07 20:14:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like it. It's good and dont let anyone discourage you.
| Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
  I have to agree with dismentled..the best poetry just flows from you, just let it go.....I think I am more guilty of the other sins..hehe...
your a great writer keep it up
| Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]
  ok, you can do better than this. I know it's only "random thoughts", but none the less. Take your time, and let it come, dont make it.
| Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]


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