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    dots Submission Name: Don't Call Me a Tigerdots
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    Author: prettybaby
    Elite Ratio:    6.59 - 191/194/59
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1239
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       After "Being Taken for Granite" by Ursula K. Le Guin.


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    dotsDon't Call Me a Tigerdots
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    Don't call me a tiger
    for I do not intimidate
    I live in mild recognition
    and do not thrive on prey

    Please call me a humble lamb
    for I am not so proud
    I stand no taller than the rest
    nor do I wear a crown

    Don't call me a tiger
    for I am not so bold
    I will not shun my enemies
    nor break the hand I hold

    Please call me a gentle lamb
    for I live quietly
    When burdens fall on others
    they will not be placed by me

    Don't call me a tiger
    for I'm not an angry one
    I do not carry spite with me
    after the day is done

    Please call me a happy lamb
    for I'm not sad, but strong
    And anger isn't grave enough
    to be carried for too long

    So, don't call me a tiger
    for I'm not fierce or rough
    Just call me a peaceful lamb
    and that will be enough




    Submitted on 2006-09-08 10:36:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really beautiful, it reminded me of this poem, possibly by e cummings, called "I am a little church (no great cathedral)". You should read it if you're into metaphor poetry.

    Other then that, my only little thing was the way you described the tigers attributes...but I guess for this poem, it worked:)

    Nice job,
    Sam
    | Posted on 2007-01-15 00:00:00 | by Falling Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha. I love it Cari. I'm going to tweak mine up a little bit later and put it up. I've just been busy with my other work and a little lazy. I thought that this was a really good assignment, didn't you? It was sure better than that stupid diagnostic test. I got a 92 % but that thing was still the most boring thing I'd ever done.

    Oye.

    But anyhow, great job on this, and make sure to look out for mine, in like a million years.

    <3

    'Nessa
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Zabriel | [ Reply to This ]
      despite what you may say,i like this.it shows that you try not to be an angry person,but rather to forgive and you want a peacefull life,rather than one thats exciting,but hurtfull to those around you.i really like this and i wish more people would read this and understand that you dont have to be this big important angry person to be happy or to make a diffrence in someones life.this is going on my favorites list without a dout.

    the only thing i can see about this that you could improve is,well,try not to call your self a lamb,it implys that you cant take care of your self and that you wont stand up for your self either.or if you dont want to change that,why not make it so that insted of comparing a tiger and a lamb,its things that are total opasates.like a lamb and a wolf,or a tiger and a deer.somthing along those lines.anyway,i hope you get a good grade in english class,and that i was able to help you out.

    Keep it real,
    Faith
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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