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    dots Submission Name: I'm The Only Onedots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Haven't written any poetry in forever...I just figured...What The Hell...?

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    dotsI'm The Only Onedots

    I'm the only one that sees
    The beauty within your heart
    And I'm the only one who knows
    The lives that you've torn apart
    I'm the only one who cares
    When you tire of the life you've built
    And I'm the only one that's seen
    Any of the tears you've spilt.
    I'm the only one that asks
    How your day has been
    And I'm the only one who notices
    The mess you've gotten yourself in
    I'm the only one who cares
    Enough to make a stand
    And I'm the only one whose heart
    Is broken with the touch of your hands.

    Submitted on 2006-09-08 10:44:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This write I really like
    To me in this write you gave life to your inner conscience and she is now showing you all the faults and pluses you have in your life
    I think that is very clever
    To me this is like a mirror poem without the use of the mirror
    A way of looking at your inner self without dropping any boundaries
    Very Clever Indeed
    I Loved it
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      And I am the only one I know with cramps in her front and back...d*mn me.
    | Posted on 2006-09-19 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      At first, I thought the repeating of the phrase "I'm the only one" would ruin your poem, but I saw, as I read it through, you were making it known, that you were above all loyal no matter what he has done to you and has taken for granted. So it worked, your point was made it is you who love with no boundaries, and there should be no confusion about it. This was very sad and yet oddly romantic. I liked it alot. Overall, good write. Welcome back to the land of writing.

    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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