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    dots Submission Name: Green Under the Darknessdots
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    Author: Elissar
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 32/28/14
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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    Description:
       This was an assignment in my english class. We went outside and wrote for a half and hour about something we saw. See if you can guess all the different names I have given to things.


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    dotsGreen Under the Darknessdots
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    Softly muted green mingling with bright dewy patches. Shapes unknown to others appear, some darker than others. But light shines through prevailing over the darkness. The slender green shoots under light and dark bow slightly to the Gentle Touch. Waving slightly makes it seem as though they are greeting the Gentle Touch that runs through them. Feathered friends twitter and frolic above. The dakrness moves ever so slightly as the Gentle Touch glides past through the Great One. As the Great Circle passes over her child, the darkness goes with it. Like a dog following its master hoping for food. The Great One who causes the darkness stands tall and strong. Its relatives nearby wave their limbs in greeting. However some of the Great One's seasonal children are falling. Slowly drifing downwards in a final farewell. The Great Ones miss their seasonal children, but know new ones will arrive in time. As the Great Circle passes day after day, time wears on eternally.




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      Let's see, the great one is a tree, the great circle is the sun and the gentle touch is the wind. I liked how you left it up to the reader to imagine what you could mean and make our own picture. This was simple in writing, but very good and effective. I am glad you shared this with us.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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