It was short and to the point. I really liked it. I also think that the last line wasn't strong enough. Everything else seemed so much more in your face and fast and then the last line seemed to weak. But it was really good! Chrissy
I like that. It flowed and rhymed wonderfully. I love that it's different from the regular "woe is me" whiney, angsty, suicide bullsh!t. You know? And the length is perfect. The only thing that bothered me was the last line. It doesn't seem... I guess, strong enough. But then again, I don't know what I'd change it to.