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    dots Submission Name: Destined to Cutdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 796
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 289



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    dotsDestined to Cutdots
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    Destined to cut...
    A slut
    A spinner
    A winner
    Late for dinner
    Bitter
    A social sinner
    flitter away
    shy
    quite guy
    Artificial high
    Cloudy skies
    the last goodbye
    die....







    Submitted on 2006-09-08 11:21:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this one as well. Its short and bitter sweet. Pure emotions and feelings along with your ability to let the words flow perfectly. Great job!

    Crystal
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by fallen_angl_2 | [ Reply to This ]
      It was short and to the point. I really liked it. I also think that the last line wasn't strong enough. Everything else seemed so much more in your face and fast and then the last line seemed to weak. But it was really good!
    Chrissy
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by XxXPromiseMeXxX | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that you could get your point across without many words. The last line seemed to throw me off alittle but other than that it was good.

    ~Samm
    | Posted on 2006-09-21 00:00:00 | by LoveToHateMe | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that.
    It flowed and rhymed wonderfully.
    I love that it's different from the regular "woe is me" whiney, angsty, suicide bullsh!t. You know? And the length is perfect.
    The only thing that bothered me was the last line. It doesn't seem... I guess, strong enough.
    But then again, I don't know what I'd change it to.

    Anyway, I enjoyed this.


    Good stuff
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-09-20 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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