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    dots Submission Name: Two Dimensiondots
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    Author: mandyshay07
    ASL Info:    17/f/kentucky yall!
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 119/121/32
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 474
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 338



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       i dont know i honestly dont think its very good..but i need some feedback so im posting it


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    dotsTwo Dimensiondots
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    The blinding sun overheard
    like a huge glittering gem
    honeysuckle swaying in the breeze
    its sweet fragrance filling the air
    cool, tender grass underfoot
    refreshing rain falling down
    flowers blooming and birds singing
    the beauty of a spring day
    can never be captured in a flat world




    Submitted on 2004-05-21 20:50:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm a visual person and like things like this that paint pictures. some of it is almost cliché though. that might not necessarily be bad, just some phrases have been done before. the ending is cool though, and this is good. yay
    | Posted on 2004-05-21 00:00:00 | by spitacidsoot | [ Reply to This ]



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