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    dots Submission Name: Angeldots
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    Author: FailureXX
    ASL Info:    15/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    1.91 - 7/19/10
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 148
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1140



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    dotsAngeldots
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    Help me little angel,
    whispering to me.
    break me through this prison,
    break through me.

    Because I miss his voice,
    Which dwells upon my sound.
    We were two hearts in one,
    Now two halves are only found.

    Again again now, I'm living in the past.
    I'm livid from the memories, that simply couldnt last.
    My heart is closing down as she's whispering to me,
    "I knew he wasnt worth it, now that, you can see."

    I dont know how it started,
    but it scares me how it ended.
    You told me that I loved it,
    You said our bliss was splendid.

    But I guess I wasn't good enough,
    Not for you I couldnt be.
    I should have known you better,
    You couldn't love just me.

    Thoughts are complicated,
    Words are only worse.
    So I'll keep this to myself,
    But it haunts me like a curse.

    I want to scream it out,
    that I've lost all of my sanity.
    you were my only hope,
    And now my hope is empty.




    Submitted on 2006-09-08 14:50:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      only found this site because I google-searched for the words I'm feeling. You are speaking exactly my feeling now... and it's been since august that I was betrayed.

    so, to critique, I would have to say its true to heart and emotions painted in sharp shades reminding me of better days. days i thought would never end. i walk this earth with an ever present dagger standing out from my heart. if the blood would ever stop flowing i might die and let recovery start.
    | Posted on 2006-12-11 00:00:00 | by xrenew | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it. it was very sad and very emotional and still sticking to the dark side of things. I loved the words you used.

    "We were two hearts in one,
    Now two halves are only found."

    that was definitly my favorite!!

    but every word made the poem as good as it was.

    -Amberinaa*
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by -amberina | [ Reply to This ]



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