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    dots Submission Name: Venus and Marsdots
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    Author: mimi
    ASL Info:    30/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597/390/111
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsVenus and Marsdots
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    The sands shift beneath my feet
    as I race toward solid ground
    and your arms.
    The road is obscured,
    the lines are blurred
    as Venus and Mars are at war.
    Your eyes beseech me to
    throw you a life line of verbs.
    I have nothing but
    textures and colors.
    I need you to hold a cloud
    surround me with waterfalls.
    To hear my voice
    in the winds and join me.
    I canít be a mathematical equation
    with a formula, clear and simple.
    Be a feather or a dream
    And learn to shift with me




    Submitted on 2006-09-08 17:39:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was very beautiful it made me wish there was more to read. and like the others i love your use of metaphors. very well done.

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    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I have no idea what your poem is about but I absolutely love the expressions, the wording everything. I don't get to read this kind of poetry here often. Goes to my favourites. Keep it up, you're good.
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      lovely indeed. this is my kind of poetry..metaphorical..it just livens up a poetry.
    interesting use of metaphors.
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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