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Venus and Mars


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 99
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Venus and Mars



The sands shift beneath my feet
as I race toward solid ground
and your arms.
The road is obscured,
the lines are blurred
as Venus and Mars are at war.
Your eyes beseech me to
throw you a life line of verbs.
I have nothing but
textures and colors.
I need you to hold a cloud
surround me with waterfalls.
To hear my voice
in the winds and join me.
I can’t be a mathematical equation
with a formula, clear and simple.
Be a feather or a dream
And learn to shift with me




Submitted on 2006-09-08 17:39:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this was very beautiful it made me wish there was more to read. and like the others i love your use of metaphors. very well done.

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| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  I have no idea what your poem is about but I absolutely love the expressions, the wording everything. I don't get to read this kind of poetry here often. Goes to my favourites. Keep it up, you're good.
| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
  lovely indeed. this is my kind of poetry..metaphorical..it just livens up a poetry.
interesting use of metaphors.
| Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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