Venus and Mars

Author: mimi ASL Info:    30/f/ny Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111 Words: 99

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Venus and Mars

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The sands shift beneath my feet as I race toward solid ground and your arms. The road is obscured, the lines are blurred as Venus and Mars are at war. Your eyes beseech me to throw you a life line of verbs. I have nothing but textures and colors. I need you to hold a cloud surround me with waterfalls. To hear my voice in the winds and join me. I can’t be a mathematical equation with a formula, clear and simple. Be a feather or a dream And learn to shift with me

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this was very beautiful it made me wish there was more to read. and like the others i love your use of metaphors. very well done. al

| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]

I have no idea what your poem is about but I absolutely love the expressions, the wording everything. I don't get to read this kind of poetry here often. Goes to my favourites. Keep it up, you're good.

| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]

lovely indeed. this is my kind of poetry..metaphorical..it just livens up a poetry. interesting use of metaphors.

| Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]

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