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Open Spaces

Author: vedanta19
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Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Open Spaces

Gentle whispers of lovers fragrant midnight moon,
Afar a skyline paints moody blue,
As a tired child sleeps soundly in feather-filled pillow;

A little, wise owl nods knowingly,
When playful waves dance with dew-filled wind,
My heart sings a forgotten song of yesterday;

When sometimes moments awaken unresolved sorrows,
A quiet prayer clears a confused soul,
- a peace calms a worried heart;
Like a sunflower smiling at angry sun -
in open spaces.

Submitted on 2006-09-08 18:00:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Gaah, I'm at loss of words and I don't think beautiful can cut it this time. *bangs herself on the head*. Blast this world of so few words. It's intriguing. It sounds like a dream.
| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
  What a lovely piece of writing this is. It has everything going for it - description, emotion, wonder and perfect form and structure.

Quite superb.

| Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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