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    dots Submission Name: Lying here beside the roaddots
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    Author: AptPupilofLife2
    ASL Info:    18/M/Berkeley,CA
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 112/131/48
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 152
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 575



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       i felt the first stanza bouncing around, and then i kinda eeked the rest out. it doesn't feel as solid. but then again, my muse is a bit farther away.


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    dotsLying here beside the roaddots
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    Too many great stories,
    Too many epics . . .
    Lov's found in little things:
    Parting Kisses
    Cell-phone rings

    So sing me a song,
    let in linger . . .
    with us and our stars,
    soothing all
    the passing cars

    They're off to a Future!
    when they arrive,
    where they've never been,
    they'll start looking
    for here again

    So sing us a song
    let it linger . . .
    with us, softly, forever,
    beside the road
    here together




    Submitted on 2006-09-09 01:35:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the feeling here, that you are in the moment and are not worrying about being seen, sometimes these moments come where they are least expected, for me it was sitting at the top of some steps with my boyfriend near a boring car park, and watching the sunset together, we sat, hugged and watched the stars come out. people passed and even commented but we didn't care, that was our moment, and we've always remembered it, years later. i love the rhyme here, it seems effortless, sometimes the rhythm is a little scattered but that somehow adds to the overall meaning of the poem, not rehearsed, just felt and expressed, i loved this poem.
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by freeangel | [ Reply to This ]



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