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    dots Submission Name: Confrontation with a frienddots
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    Author: Duke Medhat
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    5.08 - 58/38/24
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 688
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 607



    Description:
       Well, it is a modern ballad about someone who had to kill his friend for his girl. In L1 "M" mean M16 machine rifle.


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    dotsConfrontation with a frienddots
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    Standing, holding my M
    At the dawn, in the hallway
    Now, it is the action time
    Naught more - to me - you can say

    In the past you were my ally
    When foe of your's, were of mine
    Then, you seized all the glory
    But now, you crossed my red line

    My girl is my - main - red line
    In minutes, you will be dead
    In past, for freedom we fought
    Now, I will blow up your head

    It is not good or evil
    It takes place beyond the both
    Yesterday, you were my friend
    Now, you are someone I loathe




    Submitted on 2006-09-09 07:47:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting. I think it is definetly unique, but I don't see why someone would kill their friend over a girl. I hope you didn't do this, or anyone you know did this. Where I live, that would be a crime. The clash of culture, its interesting. I think it was pretty good, maybe it would be better if you used some emtaphors or something.
    Other than that good job and keep writing.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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