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    dots Submission Name: If just for another daydots
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    Author: tarzan
    ASL Info:    14/Male
    Elite Ratio:    1.44 - 3/1/3
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIf just for another daydots
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    You Kept me burning like the fury of a stallion
    you boiled me when i was cold
    you were my shade scattering the meadow

    weekends we murdered together
    under the tree my lips begged me to kiss you,
    but why did it take you?

    your death is now a solid burden,
    a mark that i will always carry
    if just for another day, i could show you the world and tell you how much i loved you.

    if just for another day, i could hold you
    until your tears crawled on your cheeks.
    maybe is was your time




    Submitted on 2006-09-09 14:18:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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