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    dots Submission Name: ...And The Jailbird Singsdots
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    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Misc/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 1003
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1727



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       Being on your own is not as fun as it sounds...


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    dots...And The Jailbird Singsdots
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    IT'S A BEAUTIFUL DAY BEHIND BARS
    And i'm the bird inside the cage
    I can't use my wings
    on this side of the gate
    I need to fly away
    That empty sky is calling my name
    Now there's a gap
    Where the lines used to meet
    It's a beautiful day outside bars
    I can finally say that I'm free
    But they tell me otherwise

    And what i couldn't wait to
    give up I'm wanting back now
    (you think you know)
    I know i know

    I know I'm free
    but this isn't
    how I'd expected freedom to be
    instead freedom's what's
    keeping me off my feet,
    I need to fly away
    that empty nest is calling on me
    With all this pressure
    the wind is taking my wings
    and throwing my body back
    to that harsh reality,
    yeah, I can say I'm free
    but I believe otherwise

    And what I couldn't wait to
    give up I'm wanting back now
    (you think you know)
    I know I know

    I'm taking off
    I'm taking flight

    ...And the jail bird sings nostagia
    "Oh, how life was better as it was"
    ...And the jail bird sings euthanasia
    "Oh, how life would be better underground"
    DON'T MAKE A SOUND
    I'VE CHOSEN MY FATE,
    I CANNOT BE AFRAID,
    If it was up to me
    I'd probably
    choose something
    that chose me

    And what we couldn't wait to
    give up we're wanting back now
    (you think you know)
    I know I know




    Submitted on 2006-09-09 14:54:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, this is really good. Great lyrics.. and an original topic as I don't think I've read anything here quite like it.
    Jailbird.. meaning that's how you felt at home.. but now realize it wasn't so bad.. or, at the least, easier than being on your own?

    Again, I Like it. Good writing.

    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I know what you're talking about.
    I know. I know.
    And I love it.
    Everytime I read your writing my favourites gets rewritten.
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]


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