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    dots Submission Name: Reverie In Nocturnusdots
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    Author: brich2929
    ASL Info:    30/M/Delaware/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 27/18/10
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 110
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    Description:
       Written for a girl named Melani who I became friends with briefly and then just as fast we lost touch. This writing was based on the dreams I had of her that summer and more or less was written all at once.


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    dotsReverie In Nocturnusdots
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    Reverie in nocturnal fashion
    Unable to conceal my passion
    Your face intensified by night
    Your beauty magnified ten times…
    This something seems so right

    As you draw near
    We embrace, hold hands and kiss
    This moment of ephemeral bliss

    But in our instant of fleeting power
    The impending dawn grows ever louder

    Before too long
    You are gone,
    The moon and stars above you.
    I convince myself it wasn’t wrong—

    I never get to say
    I LOVE YOU

    8-23-99




    Submitted on 2006-09-09 19:23:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good...much to relate to...well some people just come and go away..but what remains is their memories n beautiful poems this way...i agree the rhyming deceives somewhere but the thoughts strike me
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by anna kareinina | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh the pain of a lost love - the wonder of 'what if', and 'what might have been'. Can be hard to get over sometimes.

    Who knows though, if it is meant to be, your path will cross again.

    A very good write.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sweet. I liked it. I do have to wonder if you were trying for a rhyme scheme here...Some are rhymed, but others kind of break that. If it's part of the effect you were trying to create, it's definitely new. Not sure how I feel about it, but it is good overall.
    | Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by Lessa Solarem | [ Reply to This ]



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