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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This is the series from which Violet came. The poems are supposed to be like snapshots of a relationship.


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    Red

    The color of blood, roses, and your sweet lips.
    How can one be so bitter and still be so sweet?
    I lie in bed like a stone and dream of you.

    Orange

    Ocean sunsets and tiger lillies are burned onto my retinas
    The cold wind bites into my skin,
    and it's far too late to be so cold;
    I wish that I could say the same for you and me.

    Yellow

    Dandelions scatter the lawn
    at the house where we used to live.
    They make me think of fireflies,
    and our children at play.

    Green

    The color of your eyes and nature when fresh and new,
    and now I feel so old
    because I carry this dreadful weight
    that I'm too weak to cast away.

    Blue

    The hue of my soul
    vast as the sky
    yet deeper still,
    but never as deep
    as my love for you.

    Indigo

    I remember walking in the tide
    hand in hand
    our jeans rolled up to the knees
    and realizing that
    there never was a smile as perfect
    as the one upon your face.

    Violet

    Like a violet surrounded in mist
    I'm a haze that doesn't know what to be,
    so pround, so bright,
    yet, I look at the world
    through borrowed eyes
    that in everything
    can only see you.




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      I liked "Violet" alone, but this is nice. Really nice. Snapshots, indeed. Blue was very poignant. Well done. <><
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      To me they really do read quite differently.,,but as you say they are separate poems. I like Violet on its" own but overall if I had only room for 4 lines on a scrap of paper--, and wanted to jot something special down, I would pick Yellow. There is something haunting about the thought there, it is a wistful comment on fleet time;The dandelions the constant, the golden numerals,...while the hands just keep moving on.( Excuse my rambling, sleep deprived,,,the mice are at it again)
    --then of course I would realize I have room on the other side of that scrap of paper, and copy Orange, as the bright images and stark contrast appeal, as does the the last line..I really like that! Thanks, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, it is kinda traditional, but in a cool way...!
    I like the second stanza about orange, very well written... :)
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by caspian | [ Reply to This ]


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