Unearned Love's Nights by AptPupilofLife2

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Author:	AptPupilofLife2
ASL Info:	18/M/Berkeley,CA
Elite Ratio:	6.82 - 112/129/47
Words:	154

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Unearned Love's Nights dots

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Nights are always long when you're alone
and short when together
and middle when unknown.

Tonight is long.

There are dreams deep behind my eyes
if you look right through
my skin's lies.

But when i search for them in tranquil water,
I see cold colors
around empty black slaughter.

These dreams a re my lenses; they color my sight.
Though I know they are,
I can't see them quite . . .

But in the purest void: starless black night,
the void is a screen
reflecting my sight.

In the morning we forget a Truth Night's glare,
it's easy to stumble on . . .
forget all that was there.

You're behind my eyes, you and a pride
but it blocks you out
and thus i am denied.

We accept the love we think we have earned
and I haven't.
so away I have turned.

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I like the mix of emotions, with a black weiriness with the world, a self denied love that might light the blackness.

Alas, I gave up on my dreas when they started to include logicaly equations to solve the worlds problems. . . so I can't really even guess at yours.

As to the truth that comes to us on the blink of sleep (or in dreams themselves) only to be forgotten before it can be learned from . . . I keep pen and paper by my bed. Not that it helps much. AndI admit it is easy to forget. I think I miss my sleep too much to really care what it carries with it The combo of missed truths and missed/selfdenided love gives the poem a decidely dark feel.

Is pride really what keeps you from love? Or is it commitments, promises, work, and lack of time? I cannot imagine you being simply too prideful. I think you mean that it is your self respect, and pride in yourself, the positive sense of the word, which means you cannot bring yourself to love this person until you have earned it and it is rightfully yours... in that sense I think it shows a great (but sarrowful) discipline.

I know perhaps this comment winds too far from your writing, but forgive me, I know you too well and I am distracted today.

Im glad I got to talk to you today. Always is.
Love
Moot.
| Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by dvd7936 | [ Reply to This ]
There are dreams deep behind my eyes
if you look right through
my skin's lies.

But when i search for them in tranquil water,
I see cold colors
around empty black slaughter.

AMAZING! so much engery so much emotions so many thoughs go threw my head! its amazing job

*~Jackie*~
| Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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