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    dots Submission Name: the lies of love and lifedots

    Author: eagle wing
    ASL Info:    15/m/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 29/34/24
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Depressed
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    dotsthe lies of love and lifedots

    They say its better to have loved and lost then to never have loved at all.......I strongly disagree......for the pain of that loss is immense and fades slowly and when it does fade it leaves behind scars and......an emptiness that is hard to refill....pain subsides with time the scars it leaves may never go though.....you are constantly reminded of the pain you felt and the memory hurts........but the emptiness.......its horrible for the lost love that once filled it is long gone and the pieces of that love are scattered to the wind.....for some they think there is no hope....for others they move on......but when you have lost the pieces to a over and intended to hopefully return it to someone else they dissolve in your hand....and are gone

    Submitted on 2006-09-10 14:37:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      With this I disagree,
    only for without the hurt where would your creativity be?
    You could not have explored and shared this with us if you did not actually feel it. it is a double edged sword but it is needed.
    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by Swanne | [ Reply to This ]
      ok, first off...typos. toward the end i think it is supposed to be love and intended. there are probably more, but those really stood out to me. secondly...i think that there could be more to this...it seems like a vent because there is a huge use of the dot dot dots. so if you are going to vent, put all you've got into it, dont hold anything back. swanne is right...without hurt there is no creativity or emotion. ron is also right, dig deeper, look beyond the surface. people have layers. so now that you know that the above mentioned writers are right, what are you going to do??
    | Posted on 2006-09-11 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good write but I can not help but feel how much better this write would be if you just dug a little deeper into your thoughts and came out with some more true honest emotion
    I am not saying this write is bad because it isnt I just feel a little more input can create a truly great write
    I look forward to reading more new writes from you
    God Bless
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-09-11 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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