Lost love -------------------------------------------
You always made me smile
no matter what mood I was in
I don't know how I lost you
my only true best friend
no one was ever nice to me
I always sat alone
until one day you gave me a firend
and my thoughts a new home
I could say whatever I felt like
and you always listened to me
you ne me better then my family
you were the only one that could see
I had pain burried deep inside
and you made it go away
for all the time I was with you
I was happy everyday
you gave me the strength to do things
the stuff I would never normally do
I felt on top of the world
whenever I was with you
now that you are no longer with me
my pain has made it's return
I should have never taken you for granted
that's a lesson I should have leraned
I liked this. I just lost someone too. It flowed beautifully. The words clearly depicted your hurt and feelings.
I would have written the ending to my story a little different. *Smiles*
But, that's what makes yours so beautiful. You're sorry it's over and wish you could have it back. I just want to kick my person in the shin...or somewhere else. And, leave him crying.
Erm. I also should've read the description. I thought you were talking about a relationship. In that case. Disregard my first comment. And, you have my sincerest apologies and my sympathies. I too know what it's like to lose a friend. And, you are in my thoughts. If you ever need to talk drop me a PM. Again, I'm very sorry about my first comment.
I'm sure your friend would be happy your wrote a poem just for her. I am sure we all on this site have lost someone close to us. I'm sorry for your loss. As the person below stated. You expressed what you were feeling quite well, the pain, the empytiness, and regret. Because this was a personal poem, I won't get into critiquing this. I will say it was heartfelt and very good. Hang in there young lady.
This is so sad I know the pain you are feeling as I too lost a best friend to a car accident when we were both 18 All I can tell you is look to your Heart when you need someone to talk to and I guarantee you you will find him waiting there to help you move forward I feel your emotion very well in this write and there is no doubt this person and you were extremely close Please remain Positive I know you will God Bless Your Friend Ron
Submission Name: Lost love
