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    dots Submission Name: your lifes angeldots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsyour lifes angeldots
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    i chose you from from the fluffy clouds/
    to look over you whilst you lived/
    to be your angel of protection/
    im just lucky i was given this gift/
    i watched as you entered this world/
    i saw your parents smiling faces/
    i saw you take your very first steps/
    and the first time you tied your laces/
    i was sent down here to guide you/
    to comfort you when your sad/
    to heal you when you are in pain/
    and calm you when your mad/
    every good thing you have done/
    has warmed the hearts of angels/
    you dont just see the world in black and white/
    you picture it with colours and angles/
    just want you to know that im with you/
    with every step that you take/
    i will have my wings wrapped around you/
    whenever you feel lifes going to break/












    Submitted on 2006-09-10 15:27:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its cute... i really like it, it does seem like it'd be written to either a child or a younger sibling that you're very protective over... i really like it, great write
    lizzie
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]
      aww. this seems like this would be written about either ur kid or a younger sibling who u personally feel responsible for. it's cool that u feel so protective although when they get older they're gonna want their space. lol. great job
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow I liked this. It mades you feel like your guardian angel just contacted you to let you know your safe. :) I loved the ending, knowing that through any pain, youll have comfort through it. I dont think you could have wrote it any better. Great work.
    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]


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