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    dots Submission Name: Shadowlanddots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    The first searing edges of dawn
              lacerate the morning sky
                        burning bright furrows
                                                       in nuclear fire.

    Beyond the phalanx of shattered mountains,
    we abide in cool shadows of eerie desolation.
    There’s no doubt the redoubt we seek is lost
    within the hunger of illusion,
    we are the hardcore carnivore fleeing the flame of purification.

    Alabaster flowers worship the warm rust
    sucked           from tainted veins.
    The veins of Venus,
    striations of pale lavender twitching,
    crawling, writhing yet succumbing
    willingly            to
              thorny embrace.

    Claw the mark.
    Drink sweet succulence from the chalice of sin.
    Succumb to cloying redolence.
    Fear the white death.
    Feed the aching need.

    The black froth of spent frenzy bubbles
    still upon undead lips, this I sip as I cherish
    the feral glow in your eyes.

    How like madness this must seem to those….
    of lesser dreams.
    But for us there is no madness
    or delusion
    as we dissolve our beings in the primordial
    lust of inchoate desire.

    Time has become an endless exploration into forever.
    There is no path. We have broken trail into a land
    of phantasms, where reality bends knee to our will.

    To the freshness of the next kill.

    Submitted on 2006-09-10 23:26:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow! really amazing imagery utilized here. the endless frontier of oblivion, but you paint it with such distinct, and unusual images.

    "The first searing edges of
    dawn lacerate the morning sky"

    a blinding and bleeding begining

    "Beyond the phalanx of shattered mountains,
    we abide in cool shadows of eerie desolation."

    i mean this just so vivid. Truly great word choice.

    Other lines that really brought me into the world you built:

    "Alabaster flowers worship the warm rust
    sucked from tainted veins."

    "The black froth of spent frenzy bubbles
    still upon undead lips, this I sip as I cherish
    the feral glow in your eyes."

    The despair is obvious, but the acceptance and enjoyment of it sneaks up on ya.

    nicely done dale!


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