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    dots Submission Name: Puddledots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1339
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    Description:
       This is a prose poem that was originally part of a Postmodern essay that interspersed prose with poetry.


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    dotsPuddledots
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    A slow rain falls on the surface of the giant placid puddle. The puddle is glazed lightly with swirls of motor oil. The pollution renders the water pearlescent and beautiful. The heavy drops rhythmically disturb the surface like war and revolt disturbing the schema of history.





    Submitted on 2004-01-27 01:05:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      William Carlos Williams - If that wasn't your influence here, then that's crazy. War and revolt caught me off guard. And I like that, I'm glad my gurad was down.
    | Posted on 2004-04-30 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      You wow me once again! Beautifully stated.
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice. I'm not usually into "prose poems", but I like this. Good images <><
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      the words do come alive in the mind...
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by MzJae | [ Reply to This ]
      I echo Judy's comment...though I often wonder if anything is truly insignificant.So much beauty has been uncovered by artists, poets and their ilk by inspiration from such seemingly trivial subject matter. Silver
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      The rain was slow, but fell in very big drops. This came to me at the gas station. Across the street, there is a parking lot that gets this massive puddle every time it rains; I recorded exactly how it physically looked.
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Neat - amazing how seemingly insignificant things have so much beauty in them.

    (One thing - how does the gentle rain have heavy drops??)
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice peace...i love your use of words, you make the pictures come alive in my head...
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by caspian | [ Reply to This ]
      very actual. Strong. The comparision is good in your last line.
    | Posted on 2004-01-27 00:00:00 | by Aceofthedice | [ Reply to This ]


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