I have one problem with poems like these: This is well written from a purely verbal aspect, but because the symbols are so personal, I have no way of knowing if it’s good or bad writing. I do know it’s not good communication, which I believe should be one of the purposes of writing. Alteredlife thinks the frog is in the labyrinth. I think the labyrinth is in the mind and the frog is another, specific symbol –the prince that will waken when kissed? Perhaps a past experience with a real frog? Perhaps a symbol of unconscious metamorphosis? The unanswered questions make a critique of this difficult. Its like judging how good meal is when you can only smell it, but not taste it. fred
This is enigmatic and evocative. One part strikes me as not quite fitting: the frog. It doesn't connect with me. However, invoking the Labyrinth would lead me to suggest replacing "frog" with "bull" to make a clearer mind-association, likening a bull to the heart of the hidden question. Does that make sense?
Overall, an interesting write. Concise and impactful. Peace,