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    dots Submission Name: Your Eyesdots
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    Author: always_confused
    ASL Info:    16/F
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 4/9/21
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 755
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 438



    Description:
       just something i feel when i look into this person's eyes...


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    dotsYour Eyesdots
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    your eyes
    so deeply filled with admiration
    shine with their
    overpowering color of blue
    they show all the questions
    you desire to ask
    i push myself away from you
    knowing how much pain i cause
    i look into your eyes
    and suddenly im speechless
    so much truth
    so much innocence
    exist in your eyes
    if i were to accept it
    my world would be complete




    Submitted on 2006-09-11 16:57:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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