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    dots Submission Name: Callin Out All The Fakes!dots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1001
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    dotsCallin Out All The Fakes!dots
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    I walk in and say hi like salam a lakem
    Makin cake off these nigga so i decided to bake em
    Beef is not for me
    Das why my niggas cant make it to see 23
    Aint no whipes and chains but its mondern day slavery
    I see the riches yet i search em unubtainably
    New name: The guide to bring hip hop back to the center
    Tired a fake rapper actin like actors gettin paid to be pretender
    You nigga unbelievable like a dresser of cross genders
    Never comin out in the action hidin behind ur bars like bar tenders
    Now hold up i aint sayin im no kinda thug
    I just got eletric tention wit fake thugs like cotton socks and a rug
    I aint gonna lie i got no money no car a no job
    Some might even say imma fat ass nob
    But u cant deny i spit cancer like a baseball pitcher
    They say if life give you lemon queeze that shit into a pitcher
    But what happen to the part about sellin it and gettin richer
    Most of u niggas just drink it up and forget about the figures
    So you got all the ice, cars, and house but what about ur retirement
    You nigga from the galagos islands aint adaptin to a new inviorment
    Then u read these rhymes and ur forehead fill with perspirement
    Im done with you nigga just give me my acknoledgement




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