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    dots Submission Name: Waking From a Dream of Youdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWaking From a Dream of Youdots
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    Waking is a slow process
    and longer since my whole life
    with you has been a dream,
    so give me some time.
    I'll clear your dust from my eyes,
    then I can truly live.




    Submitted on 2004-05-22 07:51:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i'll clear your dust from my eyes.....i like that line, and definitely feel the same...or at least have be for. The title led me to believe this could be just a generic love poem, but what was i thinkin, this is you we're talkin bout!
    | Posted on 2004-05-24 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this it seems that you are talking about a breakup, b/c while you were in the relationship it was like you were dreaming, but now sincethe relationship is over you are awakening from the dream, i love the concept of it, great write
    | Posted on 2004-05-24 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      if it's such a dream, why wake up?! haha! i like this. i could see the fairy dust falling from your eyes. sometimes life can be like that--if this is a dream, don't pinch me 'cause i don't want to wake up! but if you clear his dust from your eyes, will you be back in the real world?
    | Posted on 2004-05-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      it's pretty cool, but I think with the concept it could be better.... because when you said "my whole life"....
    I think it'd be better as if the whole speaker's life was a dream until they met said someone..... of perhaps they're slipping back into a dream world after saying goodbye. Any way, I did like it, only the "whole life" thing confused things. I'd say if you want to keep that concept, change that line. ~Cora Windovera
    | Posted on 2004-05-22 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      I llike this. It portray waking from a dream in a way I've not read or experienced before. The wording is also very nice, 'i'll clear your dust from my eyes' is my favourite line.
    | Posted on 2004-05-22 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, this is good, this is like tinkerbell has been dripping fairy-love dust over sleeping faces... I like, a lot!
    | Posted on 2004-05-22 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      Firs to you other commenters, its faerie, not fairy. Got that? Good.
    now, to you m'lady, a wonderful write, and it conveys your message beautifully! Love this peice, and I love your new picture! You seema little angry though, take it again and SMILE!! ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-05-23 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      I cannot imagine what it would be like to date a poetic woman...let alone tolerate the same woman for more than a week before going nutso...I sure hope someone out there writes something like this about me...its lovely

    -MyX
    | Posted on 2004-05-29 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]


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