i'll clear your dust from my eyes.....i like that line, and definitely feel the same...or at least have be for. The title led me to believe this could be just a generic love poem, but what was i thinkin, this is you we're talkin bout!
i like this it seems that you are talking about a breakup, b/c while you were in the relationship it was like you were dreaming, but now sincethe relationship is over you are awakening from the dream, i love the concept of it, great write
if it's such a dream, why wake up?! haha! i like this. i could see the fairy dust falling from your eyes. sometimes life can be like that--if this is a dream, don't pinch me 'cause i don't want to wake up! but if you clear his dust from your eyes, will you be back in the real world?
it's pretty cool, but I think with the concept it could be better.... because when you said "my whole life".... I think it'd be better as if the whole speaker's life was a dream until they met said someone..... of perhaps they're slipping back into a dream world after saying goodbye. Any way, I did like it, only the "whole life" thing confused things. I'd say if you want to keep that concept, change that line. ~Cora Windovera
Firs to you other commenters, its faerie, not fairy. Got that? Good. now, to you m'lady, a wonderful write, and it conveys your message beautifully! Love this peice, and I love your new picture! You seema little angry though, take it again and SMILE!! ~Sicobe R. Crow
I cannot imagine what it would be like to date a poetic woman...let alone tolerate the same woman for more than a week before going nutso...I sure hope someone out there writes something like this about me...its lovely