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    dots Submission Name: just the falldots
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    Author: myonlysalvation
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 41/48/42
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
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    dotsjust the falldots
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    I dream things that don't come
    true
    I walk my life, fall & blame it on
    you-
    how about love beyond these word's
    but beyond these walls
    I see no ties

    no truth
    just above us only lies

    believe me when i say
    believe me when i stay
    alone, this room is so fucking cold*
    dark and only broken memories
    & the wall paper peels
    The heat beneath my tears leaves no safety for my soul
    & the fall above me
    just before the rise

    please believe me when i say*
    believe me when i stay

    growing tired of all these lies
    with no place to run
    and no place to ....

    the fall bafore the rise





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      i really like this a lot. it's real and raw. i honestly wouldn't change anything. good job!
    -sam
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by bloddyrazorgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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