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    dots Submission Name: Death of an Angeldots
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    Author: lucianraven
    ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49/67/19
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Depressed
    Total Views: 605
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 777



    Description:
       For those of you who don't know, I kind of dropped off the radar for a while, that's because I was in the hospital... the psych ward to be specific..... basically it kind of kills you in there.. and that is what this is about.I dont know though, I guess it's not really poetry or anyhting really, but I needed to work it out.


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    dotsDeath of an Angeldots
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    It quiet here
    So quiet you can't even hear them dying
    Trying
    trying to escape
    It kills you inside
    The white walls
    The hushed voices
    You just lay there
    Longing
    Longing for a splash of color
    Of red
    Bland, down to the food
    Everything slows
    Until the faintest of heartbeats
    Stops
    And something inside you just..
    Fades away
    Even after you've left
    It's never the same
    It changes you, this place
    The color inside is gone
    And everything you do
    No matter what it is
    Is to bring it back
    And you finally realize that you can't
    That its dead
    And that inside you've died with it...




    Submitted on 2006-09-11 22:29:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really depressing,
    I'm sorry you had to go through that.
    It sounds so bland....but then again I don't believe it to be a paradise either.
    Good imagery I think you could a little more elaborate with the details and add some emotion.
    Hopefully the silence wasn't too difficult for you, it has a tendency to be quite loud.
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]


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