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    dots Submission Name: Humble herodots
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    Author: lili
    ASL Info:    23 a world of my own
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 1290/797/106
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1060
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 779



    Description:
       any healp would be appretiated. doesnt seem finished.


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    dotsHumble herodots
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    Humble Hero

    You are a humble hero.
    looked up to by many,
    loved by those who know you,
    Selfless in nature.
    A person with strength and character,


    You fight for our freedom,
    With a courage filled heart.
    Leaving everything behind,
    That you know and love.

    You do this for us,
    To give hope to the future,
    Your children and theirs.
    One day we will all be safe.
    We will be free,
    From worry and the unknown

    You are appreciated,
    what you do does not go unnoticed,
    We salute you and your integrity,
    To stand up for us all.
    We all canít say we would do the same.

    You are a humble hero.




    Submitted on 2006-09-11 23:26:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      soft and kind are the words you use in this poem i like it it makes me think of the soldiers that have gone to war it shows admiration for what they do to keep us safe i wouldnt really change a thing keep writingi would like to read some more
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by blood red angel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem! It made me think of my son who is serving in Afghanistan. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by oixi | [ Reply to This ]
      A beauty this one is.

    Watch your white lines.

    Grtz,
    roberto
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by roberto | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very good. These ones are humble heros, for they are bravely protecting us and never ask for the glory. I feel you did a great job with conveying this simple truth about these men and women. I would only suggest you work on the flow and not make each sentence or line seem that you are talking directly to them as in a letter. I really liked this one. I await your next post.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a very good poem and it has a softness and an appreciation to it that is beautiful. It's a tribute to all the heroes in the world.
    Katana
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]


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