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    dots Submission Name: revolutionary theory (verse 2)dots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsrevolutionary theory (verse 2)dots
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    Yo they say knowledge is power
    So America is ignorant cuz we were powerless when we tried saving the towers
    All these governments official are cowards
    Too terrified to realize this is our final hour
    Crushing Bushs spinal column to destroy and rebuild
    Young boys try to avoid getting killed

    Hold on, Im still trying to make you think
    This land is like Atlantis
    Its all good until this bitch begins to sink
    We got more ice than we need to fill a rink
    But shit can change in the time it takes to blink
    Worshipping false gods, call em the pantheon
    The worlds against us but still we carry on
    Stare me down because your eyes are glued to the truth
    You killed Pac and Big but they still live on through the youth
    Battling brutal bastards basing biases on these backwards ambitions
    You need to know the mission of the Death and Depression Coalition
    Lost without a dream so we search for stolen visions
    Stay on the straight and narrow but still we go to prison
    The shot was dead on but it still came close to missing
    Safety precautions, getting suicidal soldiers christened
    Holding perdition as I remold your new edition
    Trying to stop your bitching
    We need a change, fuck this completion
    Battling for the top when we should be joining forces
    Some of us are homeless while others are driving Porsches
    Kids in the hood, they grow up so remorseless
    Same revolution, were just taking different courses
    Little girls get knocked up so they rush to get abortions
    Im the flicker of hope in a city thats lost its torches




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      "Battling brutal [censored]s basing biases on these backwards ambitions
    You need to know the mission of the Death and Depression Coalition
    Lost without a dream so we search for stolen visions"

    these lines are amazing and i love the last one as well. I think this is deffinitly one of your best cant wait for more!

    AL
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! Damn...this was unlike anything you have ever posted. This was a no bars held back type of rap. I just think of Jadakiss "Why" when I read this. You touched on so many subjects, yet showed how they all tie to 9-11 and now. Your rage was picture clear per line. Your desire to see change and not dilly dally anymore was what stuck out to me the most. All the while you spoke truth. Two thumbs up candyman! This is a fav.

    Magtrina
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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