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    dots Submission Name: A Fight Unknown To Mostdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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       I'm not mentally challenged but I have my weakness just recently I went through my old papers and school reports from teachers and tests I had to take.. a lot of hurtful things I found. I have an IEP... which means I get extra help in school. Sometimes it makes me feel less of a person..


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    dotsA Fight Unknown To Mostdots
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    Tested repeatedly at the age of 6
    Parents soon notified their child has a disability
    "Jacquelyn has difficulty recognizing letters, numbers oh... also appears inmature"
    All throughout these years of school
    You hear...
    "Jacquelyn will increase her reading recognition"
    "Jacquelyn will correctly read numbers"
    Going from this meeting to the next
    Or jumping from one test to another
    All she…
    All this little girl can do is try harder
    Push more
    Put up a fight no one has ever seen
    Yet it seems to not be enough
    For these people who evaluate
    This little girl
    Her willing to get better was not good enough
    For her teachers
    Not even her parents will not give her the recognition deserved!
    So this little girl in the end
    Burns out…
    For she is exhausted of giving it her all…
    So she slumps back into this chair
    She has become so familiar with…
    And she allows these people…
    To simply walk all over her!




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      wow! I like this poem, for several different reason's one is, I can relate, and two because your talking about something that doesn't get talked about. Thank you and great write.

    ~javajunkie~
    | Posted on 2006-10-08 00:00:00 | by javajunkie | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very deep write that is honest and straight from the heart
    I was this child at one time growing up as well
    I went thru exactly the same circumstances
    As we get older we find our true self
    One cannot make anothers life we have to find that life for ourself
    Excellent work
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-09-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      HAIL.

    I know life is hard and people always expect more than you can give. In most cases not even your best is good enough....

    Just remember this, the only person's opinion that really matters in life is your own. Why do I say this? Wel, if you only listen to the people's opinions aroun you, you are going to burn out cause everyone expects something different from you every time and you end up living a lie. If you listen to your heart and yourself and keep going at it, despite what people think or say, you end up living how you want and being who you want, you find your true self and you get to explore and find out just what your capable of.

    People's opinions and expectations are important but just remember that knowing who you are within is much more important.

    Keep going, you've got a strength in you that very few people have and I sense a deep understanding mind about the deeper things in life.

    Blessed be!
    Icegoth

    Ps: your poetry is really good
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Icegoth | [ Reply to This ]
      Nothing wrong with an IEP, my son was a straight A student and was on an IEP(behaviour), you write some good poetry so you can now officially stick your tongue out at those who thought you had problems with letters and reading, keep writing,
    Your Friend, Dean
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by Survivor_Dean | [ Reply to This ]
      but look at what you can do now!!
    there's a talent here even those teachers would be envious of!!
    it's amazing what can be done when we're determined enough.
    well done you,
    keep it up,
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this because like Ron said, it came straight from the heart. I can sort of relate. I am a bit slower then most others in school. Sometimes, I just feel like dropping out because I'm not smart enough. My firts day of highschool was a nightmare. I was sitting in my History class, and we were going over roman numerals, and everyone caught on but me. I felt so horrible and I still haven't caught on yet.
    Anyways, you did an excellent job at describing your feelings. I could feel some anger and sadness built up in here, but who could blame you? I even felt a little angry when you said that line; her willing to get better was not good enough. I'd hate to have someone tell me I'm not good enough after I've tried so hard.

    Again, I really liked this. Great poem, and keep on writing!

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-09-17 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]


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