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    dots Submission Name: " You are mine"dots
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    Author: Twisted
    Elite Ratio:    7.47 - 159/57/75
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 610
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       Well, this is 'chapter one' off my short stories within my main story " Una lujuria de vampiro"


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    dots" You are mine"dots
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    Chapter One



    She struggled before falling completely under his spell.

    Do you want this? He whispered dangerously to her, lightly caressing her neck with his lips.

    Yes.

    He nodded, inhaling her scent. It is decided then.

    He lifted her wrist. Will you have any regrets?

    She shook her head, pressing herself to him.

    No.

    Her wrist was lifted to his lips. Then, I shall mark you.

    He bit into her, listening to her arousing gasp and moans.

    The mark will show the world, he dropped her wrist, claiming her lips with his, and watching her shocked eyes.

    You are mine.




    Submitted on 2006-09-12 15:28:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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