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    dots Submission Name: Anywhere but Tomorrowdots
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    Author: Charles F Kane
    ASL Info:    34
    Elite Ratio:    1.43 - 4/17/14
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 649
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 846



    Description:
       The last thoughts of a deathrow inmate, just before the execution


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    dotsAnywhere but Tomorrowdots
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    Don't know where you wanna be
    Don't know if you want to follow
    But I just wanna be anywhere
    Yeah, Anywhere but tomorrow

    Cause today doesn't seem to end
    Bound by time, our eternal sorrow
    And times seeems to make us bend
    I wanna be anywhere but tomorrow

    It's dinner time, But I eat none
    I Feel no thirst or no hunger now
    Just wanna go, Just wanna know
    If I can be anywhere but tomorrow

    The time moves on, The clock is twelve
    A day moves on till it end now
    The sun is low, I sit here for my self
    And I still want to escape tomorrow

    But the night is here, and I know
    Yeah I know that I cannot borrow
    Any more time to free myself
    As I wanna be anywhere but tomorrow




    Submitted on 2006-09-12 15:44:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really good write, only thing I noticed was I "Feel no thirst or no hunger now" maybe take off the word now, or not either way, great write.
    Adding it to favs..
    D.C.M.
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by D.C.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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