Description: loosely inspired by Dylan Thomas poem "Do not go gently into that good night"
Do not go gently into that cold night -------------------------------------------
Do not go gently into that cold night
instead run like hell, run like hell.
Because there are monsters out there
monsters with guns and rifles
AK-47’s and gold chains
humongous reefers and horse needles
and cars jumping and rocking
Do not go gently into that cold night
It’s better to hide in the shadows
creep along the alleyways
Because there are hunters out there
predators and killers waiting
packing heat and armed to the teeth
dressed to overkill and murder
taking lives like it was free for sale
taking lives like it was free, yeah
Do not go gently into that cold night
Because if you walk they will get you
You better pack more heat than they do
And get them before they do to you
what you don’t want to do unto them
but maybe have to do to them still
A bullet for a bullet, a life for a life
Because it is a jungle out there
In the cold night of the city
In the freezing cold night there’s no pity
"In the freezing cold night there’s no pity " really stood out to me. It's a really good way to end this. Great job, outstading work. I think it would flow a little bit better if you were to change "AK-47’s and gold chains" To just simply "Ak-47s and chains" Removeing the word GOLD. Idk, to me it sounds better anyway. Good job, D.C.M.
HA! Oddly enough, I found this write to be kind of humorous, although I dont believe it was intended to be that way. I know this is a most serious subject of a harsh reality of the world that we live in and I enjoyed the play on the original poem. Reality is all around us, no matter how we try to escape it, it is always there. Feeling safe and secure is something that we as humans long for, we search for, yet it is difficult to find. The world we live in today is filled with violence and anger, people who have no value on life whatsoever. It is hard to trust anyone these days and this write really expresses why very well. Nice job.
Submission Name: Do not go gently into that cold night
