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love me will ya

Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
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Words: 141
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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love me will ya

one wonders where you are
where do you dwell love of mine
are you singing a song in some town
or fallen over drunk on wine

i swear i have seen you in my dreams
vibrate, quick and young
still wise enough to know better
like a lion leading his herd

will we cross paths, i hope
sharing our deepiest secrets with one another
i will dip myself in the pond of my memories
as you will do the same

solitude is a strange friend
its good for knowing oneself but nothing else
i will open my heart to another
you my dearest will read it

love me will ya
take a chance on a young man soul
forget your fears and fall in the river
pull the sword from the hilt and strike true

Submitted on 2006-09-12 17:34:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  As I recited it aloud it sounded really good. I imagined this 'young man' in your poem like a cub hopping up and down hungry for attention. Don't know why though :-) . This is an intelligent piece. Bravo!
| Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]

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