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    dots Submission Name: Subway-poemdots

    Author: Charles F Kane
    ASL Info:    34
    Elite Ratio:    1.43 - 4/17/14
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       A weird subway-ride

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    I'm sitting on the subway
    Going the wrong way
    never stopping at a bus-stop
    never getting off at the top
    A guy's looking at me
    A black guy with a grey beard
    On the seat beside him lies a turd
    Someone peed on a t-shirt
    lying on the floor stinking
    gets me thinking
    What am I doing here?

    Yeah, What am I doing
    riding on this subway
    with flickering lights
    gang-members instigating fights
    shooting up the place
    Cops spraying them with mace
    Tossing people to the floor
    Cracking skulls of the poor
    What am I doing?

    Where is the Subway Jesus
    and the church of Subway Salvation
    When comes the day of Tribulation
    When the Subway God gets me
    saves me from this Subway hell?
    Maybe it is just as well
    I don't believe in God anyway
    Haven't prayed one single day
    of my fucking stinking life
    And I never had a wife
    So I continue to ride this subway
    maybe I'll go the right way
    for a change.

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      Its good, I know I often look at a sub-way as hell. Things always happen and then the though of if the sub-way broke down and the lights went out... you have to wounder who would make you their first lil [censored].
    Good job,
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by D.C.M. | [ Reply to This ]

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