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    dots Submission Name: Hanging Ropedots
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    Author: MorbidAngel114
    ASL Info:    20/f/Behind you
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 445/480/114
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 775
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 726



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       I don't know...I think Ben going away has a really bad effect on me


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    dotsHanging Ropedots
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    Voices wrapped around her head
    Strangling her neck
    Secrets whispered in her ear
    Words float in space,
    Things never to have been said

    Hide,
    Cry,
    Never Forgive


    Her dark green eyes
    Try so hard
    To fight those tears
    But drip by drip
    They fall down her cheek

    Lie,
    Die,
    Keep Breathing


    Unable to escape her pain
    Loss of words
    Describe the loss of worlds
    A pathetic being
    Lost in desperate grief

    Whispers cease
    Enveloped by her anguish
    She is now alone




    Submitted on 2006-09-12 20:26:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think its more than good, and way more than fantastic...

    this is sooo going on my favs...

    just the whole style of it was excellent. I loved it so much. The whole italic words things thats awesome... i was thinking maybe this could turn into a song.

    I know if it ever does, and i hear it on the radio..

    i'll know who wrote it... well sorta know..

    lol

    anyways

    i love it

    the imagery is consistant

    MDP

    xx
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by MysterydarkPoet | [ Reply to This ]
      *Wipes tears away* Lordy. girl. You've made me cry with your poems tonight.

    Oh and more than that on your page right here has made me cry.

    How bad can one girl mess up?

    Don't let go of him, Kat dear.

    *HUGS*

    ~Big Sister
    | Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      Well Hello there Cat!!!!!!
    Hpw the Hell have ya been?

    In reading this I sense the feeling of being alone not knowing what the futire willl hold for you and Ben?

    I like the formatting of this and the whole thing flows really well.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]


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